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Problemless with problems
by Rebel Leader
Location: Where angels lose their way...
Age: 22    Sex : M
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The hot tub 11/15/2001
Here is a little story I made up last night. Just read it and tell me what you think, if you understand it and everything.

In a different universe there is a planet. In this place it is constantly cold but the people don't know anything other than cold. No one has ever been warm before. There is a man who lives away from the rest of the people and he has a telescope with which he watches everyone. In this universe everyone lives within the telescope's range. The man has nothing better to do than watch the people. There is no material in this place to make anything very warm with.

There is a being made out of swirling wind on this planet. He found some sand and dirt and decided he wanted that he wanted more mass so he went and picked it all up with his winds. He then wanted to bring this dust everywhere, filling the air, including the man's house. The man certainly did not want to be dirty, or the air anywhere else for that matter. Now, because of the wirlwind, there is dust in the air everywhere, making it impossible to stay clean. The dust would be breathed in, causing ill effects to the people. The man noticed how the dust made everyone dirty and sick, and he himself was always clean because no dust came to his house. He liked to be clean and he wished everyone else was clean also, but they live among the dust. The wirlwind stayed above the clouds where no one except the man could see him, but his dust fell down to the people below without stop, making it an unhealthy place to live.

The man had a hot tub; the only source of warmth in this whole place. He wanted to invite everyone to his house some day so they could sit in his hot tub and feel warmth for the first time, but he wants his hot tub all clean, so he will not invite anyone who is dirty at all inside. He sent a message to everyone that he has a hot tub, but they have to have no dirt or dust on them to rest in his water. He also told of a winter that would freeze everyone into immobile ice cubes, but they would feel the coldness constantly, and it was coming and would last for longer than anyone could count, and that the hot tub would be the only place to escape the cold. The man invented a dust filter and he sent the instructions of how to make it to the other people. The design was simple, but many people did not want to go through the trouble of finding the parts needed to make the filter. So they substituted other materials that were easier to get. They thought their materials would work as well, but they didn't. Others left out parts of the design that they felt didn't need to be there. Their filters didn't work well either, but it was good enough for them. But there were a few people who went out and found all the materials needed and built a filter for themselves and no dust entered, but everyone was still dirty from the dust before they made the filter. (each filter was only enough for one person.)

The man saw that the filters that were made correctly worked perfectly, meaning the people who used them didn't get dirtier than they already were. He sent instructions stating that washing oneself would get the dirt off, but only if it was used with something called "soap" which was another of his inventions. He gave some to the people who went through the trouble of making the filters correctly and the soap would wash off all the dirt guaranteed. The only drawback was there was only enough soap for everyone to use once, so once you were clean you couldn't get any dirt on you again, otherwise you wouldn't be allowed in the hot tub. The people who changed or left out parts of the design of the filters did not receive the soap because they didn't make the filters good enough so they would just get dirty again, so when they washed themselves with just water it didn't get the dirt off.

Once completely clean, the people were more vulnerable to the cold, and the filters had an extra feature that was like a heater, but only if built correctly. The filters had many settings, and different kinds of dust came and the filters had to be adjusted accordingly. Only the manuals told of how to do this, but again, most people left parts out that were too much work, or they felt wouldn't matter. There was a weekly technical support that you could go and share any settings you found of, or ask questions. Each technical support group was based off the manual, but most groups left things out that they didn't understand.

Some think the hot tub isn't real. And most of the people don't understand what it would feel like to be warm, so some don't even care about it or they don't think it would be any better than they are now, like if you never saw TV you don't miss it. No one has ever seen it, except the man who owns it at his house. Some have tried to find the man's house, but have failed. Since these people don't believe there is such a thing as a hot tub, some have tried covering themselves with mud to stay warm, making themselves even dirtier. But they did not care because they didn't understand how warm a hot tub would feel.

On this planet people make very little physical contact. The most anyone does is hug, but hugging is a very big thing. The people who got completely clean do not want to get dirty again because they would have no way of getting clean, but almost everyone on the planet wishes to hug someone at least once, but the clean people cannot hug anyone who is dirty still, otherwise they will get dirty themselves. So only clean people can hug clean people if they want to stay clean always. This is how everyone is at this planet, until that cold winter comes.

 
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Well.. I would understand it as pro-christianity.. I could be wrong. But I liked it alot.. i'm RC'ing it.
[.R.a.n.c.i.d.]

tHAT IS a very interesting story..kinda like a myth. I like it. It is very well written. If I were a teacher I would give you an A. [pink_glitter]

well... it sounds very much kinda like your religion. Like the guy with the hot tub would be God, and the people who obeyed eveything and can only be close to eachother is like your church. And the other people who will never be warm are the rest of us. I dunno... maybe I'm reading to much into it. ~shrug~

Lates, Kelli


Woo! I got it right. I'm so smart.. hehe
RC means Readers Choice :)
Take Care.
[.R.a.n.c.i.d.]

Hey again. Umm..thanx for the note. You are right. There are a LOT of depressed people around here. I like talking to people who are happy and optimistic. Depressed ppl make me...well depresed! LOL!

later dayz,

glitter note me back

[pink_glitter]


Interesting story...
I like that very much. [.false.illusions.]

ya know what....I could just hug you to death right about now. Well, ok, not to DEATH, but you get the idea I think. That just may be the cutest thing you've done for me. A dozen notes.. ~grins~ you are the greatest best friend a girl could ask for. I really really really wanna talk to you... so get on already!!! Ok, so you are on, but your not here.. so get back here.. yeah, thats it..

luv Kelli

 

   


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